On Excessive Packaging
Wandering at the supermarkets, you could find that the shelves are filled with fancy and excessively-packaged goods with high price, especially when festivals approach. Although the government has much concerns over this issue, the phenomena are still common.
The reasons can be listed as follows. First, manufacturers could benefit from the over-packaging. Fancy packaging would increase the price to a large extent, from which they can earn more money. Secondly, some of the goods are brought and sent as gifts to our relatives and superiors. Gorgeously packaged gifts would be more attractive and add “face” to the one who buys and sends them.
From my point of view, excessive packaging is a waste of resources and money. Most people would throw the package away after they open it, which would lay heavier burden to our environment. To prevent this, every citizen should be aware of the problem, and strict laws must be made or reinforced to restrict the manufactures from excessive packaging.
最后，用词方面，文章对“过度包装”使用了多种表达方式，如fancy packaging, luxurious packaging, glorious packaging等等。这样文章便不会显得“干燥”，让阅卷老师怀疑你的词汇量。因此，同学们在平时一定要注意同义词、词组的替换和使用。